Pages

Friday, 18 August 2017

the pirate legend created by Nate

Aloha.
This is my character description about a pirate

The pirate legend.
As the pirate finishes killing another pirate he peels the flesh off the pirates head. He holds the skull in his hand and says to his mates sail to treasure Island. 10 minutes later they land on treasure island. They could not see the treasure captain puts his sword down on his mats foot. His mate says ouch the captain pulls his sword out of his foot and says dig you barnacles.15 minutes later they found the treasure. They all had a dance party.

-
Labels: , ,

5 comments:

  1. Anonymous29 August 2017 at 12:08

    Hi Nate i really like your story definitely when the pirate peeled the other pirates skin of i would like to hear your next story.

    ReplyDelete
  2. Anonymous18 September 2017 at 14:32

    Kia Ora Nate
    My name is Rhia. I am 9 years old and I go to hay-park school.
    I really liked how you added in the picture to give it some detail. Next time can please give more information and make more blog posts so I can comment more!
    I hope you can check out my blog called hpsrhiap.blogspot.co.nz
    Blog ya later.

    ReplyDelete
  3. Anonymous18 September 2017 at 14:37

    I like your writing about a pirate and I like how you have lots of information. Next time could you have more information on the top of your writing. Do you like pirates?

    ReplyDelete
  4. Anonymous18 September 2017 at 14:42

    Hi Nate,
    My name is Nathaniel and I am a student from room 9 in Hay park school.I really like your first sentence because it gives me a scary feeling witch I like.When you had a pirate in your story it reminded me about a person called Sir Peter Blake.We learned about him when we went to came in MERK.If you don't know what MERC is MERC is the mrine edgeucashion recreation center.He was killed by pirates and he was a insperation to other people and kids.As a year four I am shocked and impressed at your work.As a better way to make your work better and like a year 5 or 6 is to make sure sure some of your writeing make sence, and to make your writeing more longer because I recond that if other people in the world see your story they would like to see more.Thank you for reading my comment and I hope I could see another story .

    ReplyDelete
  5. Anonymous18 September 2017 at 14:45

    Oops I speltse spelling mistakes
    Education
    MERC
    Marine
    Inspiration
    Writing

    ReplyDelete

Subscribe to: Post Comments (Atom)